Weekend open thread

A return to routine. Readership is steady at the 100 level. You are cleared to tell your friends again.

I’m going to be using the chapters following the current batch to work on particular elements of my writing. Since the only one I have anything approaching a concrete plan for is Eirik’s, I’ll talk about that first. One of the major issues I have is pacing, particularly in this medium. My typical process for writing a chapter goes like this:

  1. Come up with a major event to take place.
  2. Decide that the setup to the event and the event itself won’t fill the chapter.
  3. Advance the plot slowly, taking up more entries than necessary
  4. Realize that now I no longer have enough space to fit in the main event.
  5. Write frantically, trying to fit it in anyway.
  6. Realize it’s no use and push it off until the next chapter.

It doesn’t happen that way every time, but so far it’s done so with depressing regularity. With Eirik’s chapter I’m going to experiment with a lot more planning than usual, attempting to lay out what needs to happen in each entry in some detail, and see if that gives me a more structured feel. Of course, there’s the issue that the chapter may end up feeling more like an episode of a TV show than a chapter of a novel, but I don’t know if that’s an entirely bad thing.

Apparently I am now the second Google result for ‘Septumvirate’. Bam.

In other news, some unrelated writing to share!

NPAS Warspite and NPAS Hermes drifted along in what any halfway competent astrogator would have refused to call orbit above Jason, the largest moon of Threshold VI, which itself was locally known as Argo. Both ships showed signs of battle.

They’d got the better end of it, though, thought Ship Commander Charles Weatherby of Warspite. Their opponent, the Exile Fleet heavy cruiser Vengeance, which had struck her colors five minutes before, wouldn’t last in Jason’s orbit for more than one or two more revolutions; after that she’d most likely fall into Argo, and if Weatherby or Lassiter aboard Hermes couldn’t get a prize crew to her and get her maneuvering before then, they’d have to deal with lifeboats, too.

Weatherby had more pressing issues, though. Warspite was in a bad way. She was a point-defense cruiser, built to support fleet actions, limited in armament useful against large ships, and hardly a match for another vessel of her size on the best of days. Vengeance was bigger, and only a handful of Confederate cruisers were capable of taking ships of her class in single combat in any case. It was a good thing Hermes had been close at hand when Weatherby’s deck officer called out the contact. Her centerline kinetic had been the deciding factor, even if the rest of her armament had been as ineffective as Warspite‘s.

Weatherby kicked off a bulkhead and floated into the patrol bridge, near the ship’s bow. Miraculously, it hadn’t taken any serious hits—CIC, amidships and centerline, hadn’t been nearly as lucky—most of the screens still worked, showing test patterns or no-signal status indicators. A pair of engineering warrants were splicing test gear into the cabling leading to them. Four officers were waiting for Weatherby. They were Ship Subcommander Athelney Jones, who’d been running damage control during the battle, and Warspite‘s senior lieutenants, Callamy from engineering, Leighton from gunnery, and Rawlings from navigation.

“Well, gentlemen,” said Weatherby, catching himself on a console and a toehold, “where are we?”

“Nowhere we’d like to be, sir,” Jones said. “Seventy-one men dead or dying, including Mr. Tillis and Mr. Bullington. Another hundred and twenty-four out of commission for the near future.” He looked grim. “We’ll not be fighting until we can come up with more of a crew, sir, or at least we’ll not be fighting well.”

Weatherby nodded. It was a serious blow; Warspite‘s complement was at two-thirds strength, and the loss of two senior petty officers wouldn’t do anything good for morale. “Engineering,” he said. “When will I have my ship back?”

“Not fully until we refit,” Callamy said, in his typical soft Highland brogue. “You’ve maneuvering control in all three axes right now, captain, but it’s not fast. I havna had time to see what I can put together from the rest of the thrusters. Of the mains, we’ll not be using one, three, or four again. The rest are coming along. In another half an hour we may be able to answer a slow bell.”

Weatherby looked to Leighton. “Better news, sir,” the lieutenant said. “The primary point defense computer survived. We have twenty-eight working masers and thirty-one point defense guns which can still put munitions downrange. We can fire from one missile tube now—maybe another later once we steal parts from the others—and two of the autocannon. Ammunition may be a problem. We took a hit to the number three magazine.”

It was something less than half of Warspite‘s normal armament, but enough to protect herself and Hermes on the way back to the nearest Naval Arm installation, supposing they were able to avoid any foes of Vengeance‘s caliber.

That left Rawlings. “We have a working radar set. We’ll have to see about the infrared, but Callamy’s boys have more important matters on their hands. The message laser is at your disposal. We’ve been signaling Hermes, but there’s been no response.”

“What about the flight deck? Can we get a boat over to Hermes?” asked Weatherby.

“No sir, unless we cut the doors away.”

“Is there a reason not to?”

“We havna yet pressure-tested the adjacent compartments, sir.” Callamy grimaced at the captain’s look. “We lost containment on the number three engine, captain, and she melted a hole in the pressure hull. I’m working wi’ half a crew, man, in a compartment that’s halfway open to space. You canna expect miracles.”

“We’re rather going to need some,” Weatherby said. “Rawlings. Is Vengeance responding to signals? Good. My regards to her captain, and tell him to launch lifeboats while they still have the delta-v to match courses. Vengeance is a loss.” His officers took the news well, considering they’d all just lost a small fortune in prize money. “Callamy, I want those flight deck doors open in no more than thirty minutes. Engines are your second priority. I want a one-third bell in ninety minutes. Leighton, am I to assume that the number three magazine is open to space?”

“Yes, sir.”

“Round up as many sailors as you can find and get that hole sealed. Cut from the interior bulkheads if you run out of patches. Gentlemen, I want Warspite and Hermes underway toward safety in two hours. The enemy knows we’re here, and we’re in no shape for another fight. To your tasks.”

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A Voice Beyond Her Years No. 1 – Show Yourself

Something sprang from the stone on Anja’s palm. It was eye-watering to look at, an insubstantial shape which called to mind the great predators of the south not by their shape but by how they moved together, and at the same time a massive, terrifying presence.

The room was large, but not large enough to contain it. It curled snake-like around the Septumvirate’s table, opened its mouth, and roared, and in an instant the chamber was plunged into total silence. The mages leaped to their feet, and suddenly a gale-force wind whirled around the room. It forced the draug up against the wall, but the creature reared and swooped at them.

Anja saw one of them standing still, no longer working the winds that whipped soundlessly around them, staring at her in naked disbelief. The draug was thrown off course by a blast of air that shook the masonry, and as it came around for another pass Anja felt it thrust talons forward.

“That’s enough,” she said softly. Her voice cut through the shroud of silence, the only thing audible in a room that should have been by all rights shrieking with wind and echoing with the shouts of battle. The draug clawed at the air, dragged inexorably back to its prison, and all eyes turned toward Anja.

She closed her hand around the stone. She found she could hear again, but nobody said a word. There was nevertheless a question hanging in the air, and so Anja answered it. “I— I didn’t know how to kill it,” she explained. “So I saw what it did to me, and did it back.” She wobbled on her feet, voice still soft. She was suddenly very tired. “I’m sorry. I should have warned you.” Hans had moved to stand next to her. She hadn’t seen him come back into the room, but with a grateful smile she steadied herself against his arm anyway.

The winds from the brief struggle had blown the Septumvirate’s hoods back, and they looked somewhat less intimidating without them. They blinked, returning to their seats, and stared.

Eventually, one of them spoke. It was the same one, Anja dimly recalled, who’d been staring first, when the draug had been present, and also the one who had asked what she’d done with it earlier. He was short and wrinkled, and had no hair left beyond the two tufts of white above his ears, but something about his eyes suggested to Anja that there was still an active mind behind them. “Are you alright?” he said. She didn’t expect the kindliness she heard in his voice.

She smiled in what she hoped was a reassuring way. “I will be, thank you. It was easier than the first time.”

The old man laughed. “I expect it was.” He glanced sidelong at his colleagues as he shifted in his chair. “Would you care for a chair, child?” Anja nodded. “Master Skräskyddsling, would you be so kind as to locate one for her? Thank you. Now,” he said, addressing Anja again, “you seem to have some control over that thing, and while I appreciate that you don’t have the vocabulary to give us a technical explanation, an intuitive one will do.” He smiled sympathetically. “I’m sure it’s a burden you don’t want to bear. If nothing else I expect we can help with that.”

Mikel returned with a servant in tow, who placed a chair behind Anja. She sank into it with a sigh. “That would be nice. It’s a lot to worry about.” She opened her hand again and brought her eyes down to the pebble. “It’s a cage,” she said uncertainly. “The draug is stuck inside, but I can open the door to let it out.”

“Yes,” said the old man. “When you did, was it under your control?”

Anja thought about it. “No,” she decided. “Not until the very end. I was…” she began, and after a moment or two of vague gesturing she said, “I was trying to tell it what to do, but I could feel it pushing back. I guess you could say I had to shout, maybe?”

“Could one of us have done it?”

“I— I don’t think you have the right kind of cage.”

“I see.”

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Long weekend open thread

“I’ll take Before and After for 1200, Alex.”
“The days Saturday, Sunday, and Monday, often used as a blog post title to encourage comments on any topic.”

With that unfunny Jeopardy joke out of the way[1], thanks for reading so far, and I hope you’re enjoying it. We come now to that most irritating of web serial media events, the hiatus, which (as I’ve mentioned for the past few weeks now) will last until September 2nd. Three Arrivals ended on page 49 of my notebook of many words[2], though, and now I’m on page 118, so there’s plenty more in the pipe. I still have to type all of it. Next week is going to be busy.

To avoid clutter, I’ll be using comments and/or edits to this post to keep you posted on how things are going. In other news, this is possibly the only time in the history of Many Words I will tell you to maybe hold off on telling your friends until updates start happening again. Otherwise I look bad.

It’s Tuesday the 17th of August, and I’ve written the first eight entries in the next three chapters. I’ve typed all of the ones from Anja’s chapter, which will be titled “A Voice Beyond Her Years”. Including it, Many Words totals 15,972 words. My goal is four entries a day, which has me done on Saturday. Considering I did five today, it shouldn’t be that bad.

It’s Thursday the 19th of August, and I’ve typed all the entries from Rakel’s chapter. It’s going to be called “The Nighttime Visitor”[3]. Including it, Many Words is now 22,476 words in length. On to Eirik’s chapter!

It’s Sunday the 22nd of August, and I’ve typed six of the entries from Eirik’s chapter. I’m currently working on getting the first eight entries into the database here. In other news, I am apparently incapable of drawing and correctly filling in a calendar; as I sat down to schedule the posts, I realized that, when I sketched out my calendar back in early July, I failed to schedule anything for the last weeks of September and October. My buffer is therefore, in a single stroke, reduced by two weeks. I guess I’ll just have to deal with it.

It’s a little bit later in the evening, and I’ve uploaded the first nine entries; if my plane crashes or something you’ll at least have them. Of course, none of them give any closure at all, so.

The archives page has been updated with sections for the next three chapters, and the name for Eirik’s is thus revealed: “Never Alone”[4]. I haven’t actually finished typing his yet; I hope to do so tomorrow.

It’s Monday the 30th of August, and I corrected a typo. My access to the Internet is going to be either sporadic or expensive for the next few months, so if you’d like your comments to show up right away, you should post ’em now so I can put you on the good list. Over the last night or two, I’ve written a bit in one of my sci-fi universes[5]; that might show up here eventually as a weekend open thread bonus. Remember, updates resume on Thursday. Mark your calendars.

It’s Wednesday the 1st of September, and this is the last update I’ll be putting in this post. Tomorrow Many Words returns; we embark together on the adventure that will be the next thirty or so entries and associated snarky and/or useless remarks. Tonight I looked over A Voice Beyond Her Years No. 1 in anticipation of it going live, and after changing it to my satisfaction, I put that aside and set up Google Apps for Many Words. You can now send me e-mail at jay@manywords.press (although if you’re one of the people I trust with one of the ones I read every day, you just can go on using that one). Until tomorrow!

[1] Self-deprecation!
[2] Title drop!
[3] At this point, you really have no excuse for not knowing what Eirik’s chapter is going to be called.
[4] If you’ve been paying attention at all you should already know this.
[5] I just reread The Mote In God’s Eye and The Gripping Hand, you see. I had no choice.

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Three Arrivals No. 16 – Unhappy Circumstances

Eirik followed Baltasar out of the main hall, and they walked in silence until they reached the compound’s outer wall. They turned to walk along the path that ran in its shadow, and only then did Baltasar speak. “The letter I sent may have been a little… well, misleading.”

Suspiciously, Eirik asked, “How?”

“It doesn’t look like they’re going to try to pin anything on you.”

Eirik spun to face him. “What was all that about unhappy circumstances, then?” he demanded, waving an arm toward the main hall.

“General Assemblies are never happy,” said Baltasar, “pitting us against ourselves like they do. Twelve’s breath, you should see what they do to friendships. I’ve already had to tell three of my acquaintances we’re not on speaking terms anymore, and all over a question of admissions—”

Admissions?” Eirik shouted, smoldering with barely-controlled anger. “I’ve spent the past month worrying myself out of my mind about how to defend myself against all sorts of charges and now you tell me that the whole Assembly’s only been called because we can’t decide whether to give some little boy—”

“Girl, and—”

“—the chance of a lifetime? It’s…” He trailed off, frowning.

“—she’s not as young as you were, even,” Baltasar finished. He raised an eyebrow, and Eirik was beginning to get the uncomfortable feeling that Baltasar, ever the teacher, was waiting for him to come to some conclusion.

He stalled for time. “Why,” he asked, “can’t we decide?” It was a reasonable question. There were few enough good prospects that deciding where they went was probably the biggest source of inter-guild tension.

“A reasonable question,” Baltasar said, smiling. “She spent about a tenday dead earlier this year.”

That would indeed disqualify a great number of candidates. Spending a few days dead, spirit untethered from the body and vulnerable to all the horrors of the magical side of reality, was perhaps the quickest way of changing one’s way of looking at the world. Those who came back usually ended up with an understandably nervous outlook when it came to magic and spirits, and training such an outlook away was rarely worth the effort it took.

Eirik had a sinking feeling as the realization hit. “The girl from the west.” He searched his memory for the name. “Grevdarsdottir,” he came up with.

Baltasar nodded. “Anja,” he said, “and you shouldn’t have needed the hint.”

“So I am involved,” Eirik said glumly.

“Peripherally, at least.” Baltasar walked on. “A friend of hers sent us a letter three months ago. We drafted a few replies. Our first was perhaps too hasty, and our second too inviting. Others objected to the third. It was all handled very poorly, and it came out that some proxies had gone against the wishes of their principals. There were declarations of no confidence, things descended into ugliness, and we didn’t have a choice but to call the Assembly.”

“Have we found out who?”

“It hardly matters at this point,” said Baltasar, “and we’ll all find out soon enough anyway. I’ve only come across all this in the last tenday. I would have sent another letter if I’d known earlier.”

It was the closest thing to an apology that Eirik could hope for. “No use getting angry about it now,” he allowed. “Where do you stand?”

It was Baltasar’s turn to round on Eirik. “The girl’s been dead, but more than that she’s been under the influence of a draug.”

“And?”

“You don’t see it? She fought back and won. She clearly has a great deal of natural talent, but as far as I’ve been told nobody knows quite how she did it. I can take a guess, though—she watched what it did to her, then went and did it right back.” Eirik frowned. “You see it now, then. It’s magic of the mind—she’s not a prospect, she’s a danger to herself and everyone around her.”

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Commentary, Three Arrivals No. 16

And so ends Three Arrivals. It comes to 9933 words. I sort of wish I could’ve eked another 77 out of it, but in editing I tend to take things out instead of putting them in.

You may have noticed on Tuesday that I’ve put small caps at the front where I was doing all capitals everywhere (when not forgetting to). I’ve also gone through the archives and put them on past entries. Thrilling, isn’t it?

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Three Arrivals No. 15 – The Guild Of Aendemancers

The Hall of the Guild of Aendemancers was not as blatantly ostentatious as many of its counterparts. It was a walled compound, a couple of smallish outbuildings surrounding the main hall. The latter was the most impressive of the buildings by far—even if it would have looked a little drab next to the massive edifices of the heliomancers or the aeromancers—dozens of skylights arranged in rows along its steep-sided roof.

As the boom of the knocker bouncing off the gate echoed across the street, a head poked out over the parapet. There was a shout, and a few moments later the gate rumbled open. A pair of servants emerged, taking Eirik’s luggage before he could say a thing. One of them filled the remaining space in which he might have protested with a pleasant, “Welcome back, Master Eskilsson.”

“Thank you,” said Eirik automatically, watching as the servants bore his load away toward one of the smaller outbuildings. He went through the gate, which closed behind him, and set off for the main hall.

It was quiet, which Eirik regarded as a small mercy. He guessed that the Assembly had thoroughly interrupted the Guild’s regular routine. A pair of aspirants in formal robes heading for the main hall confirmed it: the aendemancers weren’t particularly hard on their students compared to the other guilds, but they weren’t so soft as to let their students waste perfectly good daylight on something other than training.

He followed the aspirants into the main hall. There was an atrium separating the outside from the Assembly Hall itself. It was a relatively small room by floor area, but it reached all the way to the peak of the roof, and standing in the center of it Eirik could almost convince himself it was taller than it was wide. Chairs and couches were scattered around low tables in groups around the room, which Eirik had always regarded as more than a little optimistic. Aendemancers were not by nature particularly social.

He was, therefore, shocked to see the atrium bustling, mages gathered into small knots, standing where the seating had run out. A babble of conversation ran around the conversation, carrying an undertone of nervous energy. Eirik saw a number of familiar faces all trying to avoid being recognized by anyone outside their immediate vicinity, and one familiar face approaching him.

“Baltasar Hrafnssen,” Eirik said. He smiled. “It’s good to see you again.”

Baltasar was an old man, hair gone white long before Eirik had met him for the first time. He wasn’t any less imposing now than he’d been forty years ago, if the stories were to be believed, still as tall as Eirik and almost twice as broad across the shoulders. More impressively he had kept a solid grip on his faculties in a line of magical study which did its level best to wreck them. “I would have preferred happier circumstances,” he said, “but here we are, Master Eskilsson.”

“Happier—”

“The Assembly,” said Baltasar, waving a hand irritably. “Everyone all worked up, the aspirants running wild, and nobody getting anything done. It’s trouble enough keeping this place running as it is, and now this business—”

“What business?” Eirik managed to put in.

“Twelve’s ears, you haven’t heard yet?” Baltasar was incredulous.

“I’ve just arrived.”

“Yes, I know,” Baltasar said, tilting his head toward the assembled mages. “They’ve been gabbling like a flock of geese for a pair of tendays now. I’m surprised you didn’t hear on your way in. Walk with me, and I’ll tell you all about it.”

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Commentary, Three Arrivals No. 15

Profaning by various parts of the Twelve is relatively common, particularly among the upper class and moreso among mages. Given that I’m not given to being particularly profane, and that the average human doesn’t believe in a hell to damn things to, I’m limited in what sorts of filth I can put in my characters’ mouths without getting a bit more vulgar than I care to.

Nothing quite like awkward solutions to problems of one’s own making, is there?

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Weekend open thread

And so we make it through another week. Apparently I haven’t driven any readers away since last week, so I guess we can put that down in the good news column. Either my sole RSS subscriber has started to read each of my posts twice, or someone else has grabbed the feed, which is mildly encouraging—reading via RSS speaks strongly of either commitment or laziness, and I’ll just ignore the latter.

The upcoming week will see the last two entries in Three Arrivals posted, after which (as I’ve said before, but I will say again just to be sure you’re aware) there will be a four-week break while I get all my writing together. Updates will begin again on September 2nd and continue uninterrupted until the week before Christmas. Depending on what I get done through autumn, updates may continue uninterrupted after Christmas, too, but chances are I’ll need to take a week or two off from updates to rebuild my buffer again.

As usual, tell your friends.

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Three Arrivals No. 14 – In A Different Light

Eirik would have found it very difficult to explain the way the world looked to him right then, particularly to someone who had never consciously used magic, and even more particularly to someone without a solid technical idea of what a spirit was. It was something he hadn’t yet had to do—his circle of associates included little more than mages, who didn’t need the explanation, and his family, who had always seen his talent as something to be sheepish about in polite company and who had therefore not asked any questions they didn’t need to—but Captain Eriksson was a curious man, and Eirik had little doubt that he would want to hear more about the practice of magic. For his part, Eirik had enjoyed listening to tales of the Wandering Spirit‘s exploits, and certainly wouldn’t mind hearing more.

And so, as the coach rolled on, Eirik turned his thoughts back toward trying to describe the sight before him. It was possible to begin with coarse detail. He saw a world of brilliant scintillating lights—not entirely unlike looking up from underwater on a calm day, he thought, realizing that although he’d never put it in those terms before the description was apt enough, and certainly one the sailors could relate to.

He did not see the physical world, or even anything more than the merest of suggestions of it, but as an aendemancer he was able to form a picture of it anyway. Nearby—though distance was an ill-defined concept here—some of the lights moved in unison, and if Eirik looked closer he felt strength and a plodding sort of determination, and there and gone in an instant a start as the driver cracked his whip. He felt, in short, the essence of the horses, saw the brief flare of joyous energy that was the whip in motion, heard the driver’s petty greed, rising irritation, and simple boredom.

He could shift his focus outward and see a field of thousands of lights, and look at any one to find a thousand more, flickering in and out of existence as the reality which shaped them slid forward through time. He could look still further outward, see the city as a single unified entity, huge and vital, and feel its pulse as its residents lived their lives.

Something like that would do, Eirik decided, even if it failed to capture every little nuance. It was very much like trying to describe color to a blind man—there was only so much he could do.

The world shifted around him, and he felt the carriage pass the confluence of the Hrimdal and Heimdal. They’d be coming to the Bridge of the Twelve soon, and the guards would want to see his papers. Reluctantly, he let his spirit sight fade away, staring out the window for a few minutes to let himself get used to the bleakness of the city again.

They came to the bridge, and Eirik waved his sanction papers out the window. The coach took a right after they’d crossed to continue along the road running just inside the High Quarter’s north wall. Eventually they turned southward—the High Quarter was a triangle with its point to the east, bordered on the north and south by the rivers, and the Aendemancers’ Guild hall was in the southwest corner—and about halfway there, Eirik spotted a woman walking alone. He thought he recognized her. She was short, with hair he would have called brown, but, he remembered, she insisted was dark red. Either way it was cut short, which seemed as much a concession to practicality as the sword and the armor. They had met once or twice when he’d ended up doing a favor for the Magehunters; she had enjoyed the work rather more than he had. He couldn’t remember her name, though, and didn’t think it worth the effort to dig around in his memory for it, so he let the coachman pass her without stopping to say hello.

They came to the Guild of Aendemancers, and the coachman brought his vehicle to a stop, helping Eirik get his trunk down before clambering back to the driver’s box, cracking his whip above his team, and driving off.

Eirik sighed. Here he was again, at the closest thing he had to a home in the city. Funny, he thought to himself, how in spite of that he was not at all happy to be here. There was nothing for it, though, and he let the knocker fall against the heavy oak door.

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